Feb 12, 2008

आजकल - A Poem

aajkal... kisi se nazrein milane se derta hai dil,
kahin tujhe meri aankhon mein pehchaan na le koi...

aajkal... kisi ko pukarne se derta hai dil,
kahin tera naam, jaan na le koi...

aajkal... mehfilon mein shareekh hote nahi hain hum,
tere deed per meri khushi, bhaanp na le koi...

aajkal... her kisi ki tammanayen suna kerte hain hum,
kahin khuda se tujhe, maang na le koi...

aajkal... yeh hawayein bhi meri zulfein nahi bikhrati,
kahin tujhse pehle inhein, sanwaar na de koi...

aajkal... meri nazron ka tujhe dhundhna gar dekh le koi,
kaise mujhe deewani, maan na le koi...

haan aajkal... bas yuhin aajkal...
na jaane kyun, kuch he dino se, aajkal...

Meanings:
deed: deedar
bhaanp: pehchaan
gar: agar, yadi

37 comments:

Anjul Sahu said...

It's Awesome Greva!!

हमें नही पता था की हमारे बीच एक अच्छा कवि रहता है.. आगे भी ऐसे ही लिखते रहना |

Good Luck!!!

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op bhargava said...

pretty nice peom.....but iske liye pyar hona bahut jaroori hai...likhane se pehale ho jana tha,,,,abhi tak nahi hua to ab ho jana chahiye,,,,,,
"""aajkal... kisi se nazrein milane se derta hai dil,
kahin tujhe meri aankhon mein pehchaan na le koi...""""
thats the one that i like most.....
im loving it really so nice....

ashish said...

kya baat hai greva badi romantic ho rahi hai..........waise to main poem kuchh jyada samjhta nahi hoon per padhne main achhi lag rahi hai.......maine apne roomy ko padhai bol raha hai bahut achchhi hai.........so keep writing!!!!BEST OF LUCK

mahima said...

greva tu toh kaviyatri ho gayee hain kya baat hai mam...padh kar achiee feel deti hai teri poem.yeh dedicated kisko hai yeh toh batao...and ...keep writing with same feel good factor.

poorvi...... said...

Extravagant romantic essence....[:)]

ayush said...

hey nice poem yaar...padhkar lag raha tha ..jaise kisi professional ki likhi padh raha hun..seriously...badiya hai bhari bharkam words use kiye hai..likhte raho..aur agli kavita mauin ye bhi batana ki isme jikra kiska farmaya tha..:)

sush said...

mast hai yarrrrrrr , project ka kam karne me tabhi rassssss aayega jab kuch is tarah se ho jayeeeeeee hamesha.......


waiting for new........


sushila

vivek said...
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vivek said...

greva this is .....mind blowing,fantastic,fantabulous ....
bahut acchi poem likhi hai yar ..ek ek word moti jesa aur saja hua hai.......bahut fealings hain .... no doubt har shabd bahut sahi aur socha hua likha hai .....simple & very effective ...aur kya kahe poem khudh sab kuch bool rahi hai ....mughe bahut bahut bahut acchi lagi....keep it up
and very best of luck......

Tarun said...

people say
u have to
fall in love to measure it's depth
u have to
fall in love to be romantic
u have to
fall in love to write a poem that bring a freshness on all faces
u have to
fall in love to feel like that romantic


and it was same felt by me unless some one told me to be romantic u just have to fell from inside abt the world being so beautiful and here we can live life with a smile

and here this poem is a lovely example of what i stated

vaise to greva se agar pooche to boll rahi hai ki she haven't find the one in her life per people jst guess it what's the meaning of writing such a romantic poem on the verge of Valentine's DAY

rahul said...

excellent work yaar.. keep it up

Saurabh Ektare said...

what to say........xcellent is an understatement....luks like sm seasond writer's work....keep up d gud work greva...

susmita said...

@vivek...sahi aur socha hua k saath saath shayad feel kia hua bhi bhai..[:p]
bt thn wateva it b..the depth it carries is real commendable n as the response in itself suggests..
its simply AWESOME..sush

jaya said...

poem is simply great....been wid for a considerable time...but m surprised
and pleased to find that ur a such a gud poet...hope another one is in progress!

Keshav Kekre said...

tu to and-band romantic likhti he yaar.....
wat i liked most n want to comment here abt the poem is .......... ur nice flow of thoughts n expresion of feeling in simple words without any fancy vocab. so keep it up ..

par kon he ye jise aajkal aapka dil nazrein milane se darta he???????????

pooja said...

good greva.at last tune mujhse kavita likhna sikh hi li.good.tu acchi student nikli.

chal abb no phate.really poem is excellent and awesome

preeti said...

hey greva that was such a hearttouching poem...lots of emotions were embedded..hume nahi pata tha ki apne yahan itne hidden talents chupe hain ...gr8 yar ...chal aise hi likhte rehna ...all th best ....

Rajeev said...

didi.....benazir in panktiyo ne zehen ko umang se bhar diya hai, kya tanj karoo, kya doon inke liye koi nasihat....bas kuch panktiyaan roopi nazraana sirf aur sirf aapke liye.....


Deta jo hoon main ahmiyat,
karta jo hoon main uboodiyat,
na samjho koi hai salaabat,
na samjho koi hai sehmiyat,
kehta hoon bas ek haqeekat,
ye nazm karti hai saraahat,
har labz me jaise zeenat,
na hoon main aisi shakhsiyat,
na meri hai koi haisiyat,
jo tanj karoo, ya doon nasihat.....



bas hamari to yahi hasrat hai k aap apni is zehaanat ko sadaa kaayam rakhe.....


Some words for clarification:

benazir : matchless
uboodiyat: adore
salaabat: awe
saraahat: vivid description
zeenat: beauty
tanj: comment
zehaanat: talent

Anjul Sahu said...

@Rajeev
Amazing comment dude....
humari bhi koi haisiyat nahi, ki tumhare tanj par tanj karein... bas keh sakte hain that you're genius and so imaginative.

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priyam said...

Ohh Greva....I m simply overwhelmed....Never knew that u love me 2 such a great extent that u will write such a b'ful poem for me...
all i can say is thanx for this lovely Valentine's day gift i could have ever received...
Luv u...muaaaaaaahhhhhh

khushbu said...

**********Greva***********
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TERI TARIF ME KITNA LIKHE KOI,
KAM HI LAGTA HAI JITNA LIKHE KOI..
,
****************************
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SACHI BHOT KHUB LIKHA HAI YAAR


"aajkal... kisi se nazrein milane se derta hai dil,
kahin tujhe meri aankhon mein pehchaan na le koi..."

VESE ISSE LIKHNE KI INSPIRATION KIN JANAB SE MILI HAI HUME BHI TO JARA MALUM HOO...

REALLY GOOD DEAR KEEP IT UP..

nitin said...

its a damn gud poem.....but but but....ek hi sawaal aaya hai mere dimag me ki ye tuney likhi "kiske liye"..kaun hai wo khushnasib..jiske liye itni achi feelings hai yaar....sabse achi line hai wo ""mehfilon me hum jate nahin....""....phod diya yaar.....gud luck!!!

manisha said...

kya likhu is beshkimti lazwab peom ke liye.
har shabd me feeling hai. har line ahssas hai. what a romantic peom Greva.
khushnasib hai wo jiske liye likhi hai.
yah ek oss ki bund ke samaan hai.
muzhe bahut................................... acchi lagi.
keep it up.
good luck.

laxmi said...

good yaar super. poem bahut must hai but Greva uska nam to likhna tha jiske liye ye hai.
jo bhi ho vo par hame to kisi our ke liye matter mil gaya.
keep it up likhti raho.
good luck!!
laxmi

Akshat Saxena said...

Yaar! too gud. This really reflects want a lover feels and most imp it reflects the vision of a poetess. Gud this is what we will watch out for in infosys. Carry on with ur gud thinking

dipika said...

awesome mam...:)
kahan chupi hui thi ab tak....
ab ek ek poem har class mate pe bhi likh diyo...:)sahi hai na
hmmm
ye tera is semester ka assignment hai
hehe
jitni amazing aapki poem hai..utne hi amazing logon ke response bhi mile hain ..:)..so keep it up aur ab hum sabko aapki next poem ka intezaar hai ab khush meri maa..............

ankit said...

the poem was simply great.. I feel that there is no pint in increasing redundancy n prasin u in synonyms of what people above mi comment have used...[:D].. "It was gr8" n that is it.... (n very unexpected too)

theres a famous sayin (though i dont rem the exact lingo used)..
"Dere is no market 4 ur sorrows, so never advertise ur feeling, just dispaly ur attitude"
u proved it wrong and m proud of dat...

@Priyam...
Ye acchi bhali "hamari" life mein tu triangle kyu bana rahi ahi re.... [:P][:D]

~~Macky

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maitreyee said...

wow great yar greva,
Sato rango se saji is kavita me, har ek lavz pyar ki holi khel raha hai.........ek ek alphaz piro diye ke jaise ho moti,ahsaas hai gahra jaise dipak ki jyoti,anayas ek dar hai usake chhut jane ka,par prem to dhadkan hai greva jo dil se dur nahi hoti..............,
apki is kavita me ek meethi si kashish hai...kisi ko dhundane ki betabi aur chhupa lene ki koshish hai....anjaane kisi chehare ko dil ke kone me basa rakha hai,koi dekh na le use ,palko ka parda laga rakha hai....
uske ahsaas ko kabhi kam na hone dena,chhupa lena duniya se par khud se dur na hone dena ...wo zarur milega aj nahi to kal

Ritu said...

heyy golu.....bht acha likha hai....direct dil see.....
ahem ahemm hhmmmm matlab kya ho rha hai greva.....itna acha likha hai...kuch baat to hai.....nywayss wats more important is keep it up and m sure will resd more of these in future and m waiting for it......and keep smiling.... :)

shilpa.blogg.com said...

This poem deserves nothing less than a huge WOW!
Agar ye first attempt hai to I must say...tu kaviyitri ban sakti hai....pakka..

piyush said...

i knw a little abt poem kya karu samajh main nahi aati

lekin yeah pahli poem hai jo thodi bahut samajh main aa rahi hai so keep going aur dusro ko bhi sikha de ...............plz jise se hum jaiso ko kuch poem samjhne main aasni hogi...........

shani said...

its really one of d very nice poem i ever read....if need any help of mine most welcome

pawan said...

The poem describes aptly the romantic fantasies and dilemmas of the person in love. It gives the account of the emotions and feelings of a lover
in a very imaginative, metaphorical manner......

and then the poem ends in a
usual manner, slowing down by repeating some phrases around the
keyword which is usually a suitable ending for a love song........while in
poetry and literature, I feel that one can be more liberal and can end it even
on a high note....

Overall a nice attempt by a person who claims to have
begun her tryst with poetry recently. Carry on.......

- Pawandeep